Wednesday, September 1, 2010

Prologue

Xandrous, The Betrayer, Lord of Chaos and of War, Prince of Pestilence and Persecution... he of so many names of nightmare, was once the most beautiful and grand of all drayan. Now from the pits of the underworld, flames dancing around him and from him, licking at his black winged body like hot, translucent tongues of red, yellow and orange hues, the lord of all drayan'os, those cursed and exiled, spread his leathery, reptilian wings, raised his great horned head, each horn longer than a man's body, and raged against Jandrous. Echoing for thousands of miles, his bellows could be heard in all directions throughout the underworld.

"SON OF THE ONE GOD!!!" of the One God... the One God...One God... he echoed. "You have had your day! Now is MY day! MY TIME! For thousands of years I have been putting MY plans in place. I have whispered my poisons into the ears and hearts of your beloved creatures. I have caused murder and lies— lusts and greed! I have become the father of wars!" He raised his palms, shrugged his shoulders questioningly. "You are the son of the One God?" he chuckled. "I have become many gods! Every second of every hour of every day, more of your beloved creatures accept ME as God— in one of my MANY likenesses." He paused, reflecting on a long ago memory that seemed as distant as yesterday, inhaled and exhaled deeply through his nose, and continued. "You think you won when you 'sacrificed' your mortal body in The Valley of Dragons, but in reality it was my own being in the one who ran his sword through your body— because of ME you were pierced!!! Not to save the many as you would have the world believe. As I speak to you now my armies— mortal, and immortal begin their march to destroy those whom you love. I will then march upon the heavens and claim MY right as the true god! It is written that YOU will face me in battle and destroy me!!! In truth you are weak! Your own mortal death proved that. I will destroy you! I will be victorious! I will finish the siege of the heavens I began so long ago!"

Xandrous turned toward the massive gathering of drayan'os behind him, all as black as himself, devoid of all color... almost as though they sucked in and swallowed all light, and he spread his arms wide as if to take them all in, chuckled, and roared... his echoes seemed to last forever, loud enough to escape the underworld and perhaps reach the ears of the mortal world... perhaps to reach the ears of the heavens as well. "Go my followers," he roared. "Claim your mortal commanders, kings, and generals! Let us finish this war we began so long ago! Now is our time for victory— now is our time to rule! Let it be known to the mortal world that war is coming..." He turned his dark face upward, as though looking into the very eyes of Jandrous, Son of the One God.

"War has come," he finished quietly. But even spoken softly, those words seemed to reach out of the underworld, to the living world above, and to the throne room of the One God himself. "War has come."


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Jandrous knelt, flanked by two white winged drayan, before his father.

"Father," he spoke, and then stood. The two drayan remained kneeling. Raising his head to look upon his father with eyes that appeared full of joy, sadness, and fierceness together, he took a step forward. "How long father, before I return to the world of mortals?" The One God spoke not, simply gazed beyond his son and waited... the silence was deafening, yet no one dared to speak as they waited to hear his words. And then all in the throne room heard the ragings of Xandrous the Betrayer, and listened until they concluded with a soft whisper... "war has come."

"Announce it and let it be done," the father spoke.

"Gaulin," Jandrous spoke to the drayan on his left. "Announce it." And to the drayan on his right... "Maragan, assemble the drayan for war."




©Anthony David Rosenthal/To The Valley Of Dragons 2010

6 comments:

  1. You have placed so much detail within this that I can almost feel as though I am standing from a distance watching the characters play out their roles! Outstanding!!!

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  2. This is quite an opening!

    Thank you for joining my FB fan page. I followed your link here and took a moment to read. It seems you've set it up quite nicely for the rest of the story to come. Keep it up!

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  3. i particularly like the descriptive part of the color of Xandros' blackness being the absence of light. poignant. :o)

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  4. Um, I think I've read this before... oh yeah! It was The Bible! I did like the plot though, albeit a little too close to plagiarism... Having said that I think story would be great, I just have to get past the prologue, if taken the next step to actual Fallen Angels and the like with maybe a protagonist Fallen One to upset the power of darkness over the light. I prefer twists like that personally, I don't know about most, the unexpected you know. Sorry to kinda bust your chops but good work though, it really stirs the imagination. I can't wait to read more.

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  5. Now, now... I did base some of my characters and beings on characters and beings from the bible, but other than that it's original. It is obvious that Jandrous and Xandrous were inspired by the bible, as well as the drayan and the drayan'os. It is a bit allegorical in terms of some events as well. But other than that it's an original, fictional story. Plagiarism is a bit harsh... yikes! Surely you jest. Other than that, thanks for the kind words, Dan. I'm very pleased you read it, and pleased that it stirs the imagination. That is what I'm hoping for. As you say you can't wait to read more, I can't wait to hear more from you :) Thanks for reading and commenting. I do hope to hear more from you in the future. I'm really enjoying writing and sharing this story. God bless.

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  6. Quite a beginning there. I especially loved this line "almost as though they sucked in and swallowed all light."

    Like you (and my friend Sara lol) I am also posting my novel on a blog, chapter by chapter, as I revised it (for the sixth time...)

    God bless

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